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Sick sentences - The Jedi landed on the runway. There were lots of storm troopers. There were lots of aircraft.
Healthy sentences - Enormous ships approached the land as it was getting destroyed by the plasma turrents, the Jedi and his crew has finally landed after a day flight. There was tons of storm troopers, all with guns and all with no fear in their eyes, not even a sprinkle of some. They were all coming in special built aircraft's, mostly made with steel and in weird shapes but at least they were really cool.
Good afternoon, Pavan.
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your writing on your blog. You have definitely made the sick sentences more interesting by adding adjectives and some WOW vocabulary.
Ka pai!