Thursday, 20 August 2020

My writing for today!!!!

 

Hi everyone here is my sick sentence vs great sentences upgrades. So everyone sit back with popcorn and relax a very satisfying story. 

The very bad one - The family held onto the plants. They were in the giants garden. They could see the giant. He looked angry.

The very good one -  Delighted, the joyful family held onto the very soft plants, but what they didn't notice was that it was the great ominous giants garden of doom. The little girl saw a terrifying look on the giants face as he was looking through the smashed windows.  Looks like the giant isn't a myth they thought in their intelligent mind.  They saw the giant face through the window but there was no fear in their eyes.

That's all for today folks.

Have a safe lock down !!!


2 comments:

  1. Like it, Pavan. I particularly enjoyed the "very good one", quite scary and good use of suspense. Maybe you could add a simile next time?

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  2. Thanks for your comment Mr Pressnell, I will try my best to add similes next time. I really like the very good one as well.

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